Jack and Jill went up the hill
To fetch a pail of water;
Jack fell down and broke his crown,
And Jill came tumbling after.
(Traditional nursery rhyme)
Jack is a handsome young fellow that lives in a small town called “Stumbleton.” Jack’s dad, Sir Tripton, is the king of Stumbleton. One afternoon, Sir Tripton asked Jack to meet him for lunch in their courtyard.
“Jack,” said Sir Tripton, “As you know, I am growing rather old and need someone to take over the town of Stumbleton. Since you are my first-born son, I want to pass the position as king to you. Although this is my desire, it is by law that you must be married before taking the throne."
Wide-eyed and a little caught off-guard, Jack responded, “Of course father. I will fulfill my duty as king and I will find myself a wife.”
Jack and Jill went up the hill
To fetch a pail of water
Later that afternoon, Jack was riding through the field of Stumbleton on his horse when he came across a beautiful young lady. The girl had long, curly blonde hair and eyes bluer than the ocean. Jack immediately knew that this would be his wife as well as the future queen of Stumbleton.
As Jack rode closer to the girl, he saw that she was hauling a bucket much larger than she.
“What is your name and why are you carrying such a big bucket?” Jack asked.
“I am Jill and I am trying to gather clean water for my mother and father. They are very ill and we do not have enough money to buy any in town,” said the lady.
Without one more word, Jack grabbed Jill and they rode up the hill on his horse.
Once they reached the top, Jack helped Jill off the horse and they went searching for the waterfall. During their search, the two had the chance to talk and quickly fell in love.
After many long, narrow paths, they finally heard the sound of water and began to run towards it. Once they reached the waterfall, Jack was so excited that he immediately stuck out the bucket and began to fill it with water.
Distracted by his emotions and Jill’s good looks, Jack did not realize that the bucket was starting to get full and very heavy. Before he knew it, he fell into the waterfall and quickly got swept away by the rushing water.
Jack fell down and broke his crown,
And Jill came tumbling after
Distracted by his emotions and Jill’s good looks, Jack did not realize that the bucket was starting to get full and very heavy. Before he knew it, he fell into the waterfall and quickly got swept away by the rushing water.
Without thinking twice, Jill jumped in the water and followed after him.
Once they reached the bottom, Jack told Jill who his father was and asked her to marry him.
Once they reached the bottom, Jack told Jill who his father was and asked her to marry him.
“Of course!” exclaimed Jill.
The two got married and became the new king and queen of Stumbleton. They were able to give money to Jill’s family and lived happily ever after.
Author’s note: As seen at the beginning of my story, this classic nursery rhyme is about a boy and a girl who climb a hill to get water. The boy falls down and “breaks his crown” so the girl follows him and does the same. In the classic nursery rhyme, it does not give much detail about the boy and the girl or why they are searching for water. In my story, I decided to give “Jack and Jill” more personality. I made Jack a handsome, soon-to-be king and Jill a beautiful yet poor young lady. Jack had to find himself someone to marry in order to be king. After helping Jill search for water for her family, the two quickly fell in love. At the end, Jack asked Jill to marry him and they lived happily ever after.
Bibliography: This story was created from the original nursery rhyme “Jack fell down, and broke his crown” in The Nursery Rhyme Book edited by Andrew Lang.
The two got married and became the new king and queen of Stumbleton. They were able to give money to Jill’s family and lived happily ever after.
This is a remarkable story about a boy who simply “fell for a girl.”
Author’s note: As seen at the beginning of my story, this classic nursery rhyme is about a boy and a girl who climb a hill to get water. The boy falls down and “breaks his crown” so the girl follows him and does the same. In the classic nursery rhyme, it does not give much detail about the boy and the girl or why they are searching for water. In my story, I decided to give “Jack and Jill” more personality. I made Jack a handsome, soon-to-be king and Jill a beautiful yet poor young lady. Jack had to find himself someone to marry in order to be king. After helping Jill search for water for her family, the two quickly fell in love. At the end, Jack asked Jill to marry him and they lived happily ever after.
Bibliography: This story was created from the original nursery rhyme “Jack fell down, and broke his crown” in The Nursery Rhyme Book edited by Andrew Lang.
What a fun idea, Matty! I like the way you took teeny-tiny clues from the story to create "Stumbleton" which even has a king who wears a crown: perfect! Plus it has this great fairy-tale quality with the king appointing his successor with some kind of fairy-tale marriage being required, and it even turns into a love story, with a happily-ever-after ending too. Sometimes Jack and Jill are represented as brother and sister, but I really like the idea that they are husband and wife, happily in love, just as you have shown there here. It's so sweet! You also did a great job in the note of showing your readers how you built your story step by step.
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